I'll look at your manuscript as a whole, and check things like:
- Is the beginning strong enough to hook the reader?
- Does the writing flow well?
- Is the dialogue natural and engaging?
- Are there any unnecessary parts?
- Is there anything confusing?
- In terms of grammar or style, what should you pay more attention to?
- Are there any parts that are not engaging? How can they be more engaging?

- Are the characters likeable/interesting?

- Does the plot progress logically?

- Can anything be expanded for more detail/cut for more punch?

- Are chapters ending on a high note?

- Does the book fulfill readers' tropes and expectations?(for YA and romantic fantasy)

- Are there any parts where the book loses narrative momentum? How can I fix that?

- Is the ending satisfying"

I believe books should keep the reader engaged, with a positive reading experience. A hooked reader is a reader who'll get to the end. A satisfying ending will make sure your reader gets your next book! 

I'll also provide a sample line edit, with some grammar correction, parts that need to be better phrased, and more. Comments will be in a separate sheet, with a few in-text comments and the line edit.

I write under Day Leitao and I like fantasy, sci-fi, romantic fantasy, and YA. I have a master's in English Literature, experience with my own books, and a good eye for plot. 

Not available at the moment, but you can message me for details.